my writing center visit on descriptive essay

In class we have started to discuss and write a descriptive essay on a semi new phenomenon called "vloging". Vloging is when any person makes a video of themself and puts it on the internet for viewers to watch as they please. One persons vlog could be watched by millions of people or and a handfull, but the number of people is normally not important. What is important is that the maker of the vlog puts themselves out for the world to see and is able to experience vloging and decide how they feel about it. And in many cases vloging has changed peoples lives and way they think about the world, as silly as it may sound people have found themselves in their vlogs. The most popular way of vloging by far is by way of the constant streaming video which is youtube. The vlog that I decided to write my descriptive essay about in the end is a vlog that is by a name called Supermac18. I chose this vlog because it is full of animation and colors and other things that you could go into deep detail about when you start to describe the events in the clip. Our class was instructed by Mrs. Crawford to make and go to an appointment in the english writing center. I made my appointmet early and had it. It was as always a great help to myself and my rough draft paper that I had brought to the meeting. The thing that I wanted to go over and emphesise the most in the meeting was how I could make my paper full of description but at the same time make it flow to sound good. My tutor went over the paper with me sentence by sentence to help me see the changes we were making and how he was helping me with the exact thing I wanted to go over the most.